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Archsphere: The Beginning by ~atmos00000:iconatmos00000:





The Equix

/ First Canto | First Chapter

In the beginning within the vastness of space and time, there was only Darkness. Alone in the vastness Darkness grew desolate overtime. Misery turned into anger. Anger turned into rage. Darkness raged through space and time. Amidst his chaos, Darkness unknowingly created a disruption within the vastness, opening a rift. The rift caught his attention because he saw something. The rift caught his attention because he saw.

Darkness saw a presence entering from the rift into the vastness of space and time. The waves of her presence rippled through space and time. Her presence rippled through Darkness. That presence was Light. Soothed by the presence of Light, the chaos of Darkness settled and the rift closed within the vastness. Turning to where the rift once was, Light saw that she could not go back. She approached Darkness and asked if she could stay for she could not leave. Darkness granted permission with delight. Her presence made him happy, and he would no longer be alone.

Darkness presented the vastness of space and time as her new home. Feeling very welcomed, Light spread throughout the vastness. Light spread throughout Darkness. She spread her stars and her galaxies throughout Darkness. Amazed by the beauty of Light, Darkness felt happiness for the first time. Expressing his gratitude, he promised Light he would forever protect her and forever cherish her. Light never felt such affection. In response she promised to always be there for Darkness.

Darkness was the first harborer of Light.†

/ Second Canto | First Chapter

The love between Light and Darkness grew throughout the vastness of space and time. Her stars grew and spread throughout Darkness. Among the stars was Daystar. Daystar’s radiance shined and bore the first daughter with an essence of Light. The first daughter of Light gave warmth and comfort to those around as her passion burned brightly. The first daughter was Fire.

Unlike her mother and father, Fire’s essence was too fragile to exist within the void of space alone. Therefore a son was born with an essence of Darkness. With his rigidity and strength, the son can protect Fire from the empty void of space. The first son was Earth. And so forth with Earth’s protection, Fire burned brightly his in heart.

Earth was the first harborer of Fire.†

/ Third Canto | First Chapter

The bond between Fire and Earth grew stronger through time. Fire and Earth eventually bore a set of twins, a son and a daughter. The son bore the essence of Earth and his father before him. The son was Air. The daughter bore the essence of Fire and her mother before her. The daughter was Lightning.

The twins each had a riotous persona. They wanted to venture beyond Fire and Earth’s cradled protection. And so they did. Air was the first to venture beyond Fire and Earth. Sweeping high over Earth and Fire, Air enjoyed the vast freedom. But Air always held love for Fire and Earth so Air watches over them eternally.

The twin sister, Lightning, was much more timid than Air. Lightning made herself as least noticeable as possible while still existing throughout Air. Only when Air presented a wild and excited display would Lightning build the courage to reveal herself thunderously. And Air, who shared not only the essence, but protective nature of Earth and Darkness, always looked after his sister.

Air was the first harborer of Lightning.†

/ Fourth Canto | First Chapter

Air and Lightning continued to exist through time and space and eventually through their wild display, bore their son. The son was water. Water, who bore the essence of Air, Earth, and Darkness, idolized his fathers before him and wanted to be with them all. The son enjoyed the lively presence of Air, but was also wanted to give company to Earth. He knew Earth was very close to Fire, so where Fire’s heat was absent, water would hold a strong and stable support on land. Earth appreciated the work and company of Water and granted Water with a gift. Earth presented Water with much of his land where he can express his true self. Water accepted it gratefully, providing the surface with the oceans where Water held a balanced behavior of Air’s versatility and Earth’s stability.

In the vast oceans across the globe, provided much opportunity for his younger sister. Water’s sister, who held the essence of Light, Fire, and Lightning, had an unusual ability. It was the ability to pass in and out of the rift, the very origin of Light. This daughter of Air and Lightning was Spirit.

In time, Spirit began to lose control of the ability. Spirit was becoming drawn to the other side of rift more and more. Her essence alone couldn’t keep her with relatives. Her relatives where quick to attend her plea. Her parents, grandparents, and great-grandparents each offered her a portion of their essence to help prevent her from leaving. Lastly Spirit’s brother, Water, offered her refuge.

Water was the first harborer of Spirit.

Spirit would started living in Water’s vast oceans. With all the effort put forth from the others, Spirit was still drawn into the rift. But with the combined essence of her relatives, Spirit obtained another ability; it was the ability to give life. It is through life that Spirit would continue to coexist among her relatives. As death took portions of Spirit through the rift, life would continue to spread Spirit throughout to live among her relatives.

And so dawned the balance between the eight elements.†
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Author's Comments

So yeah, after talking to ~TKNG about original stories and then seeing =DarkJediPrincess's Science Fantasy stamp, it gave me the motivation to go deep into my attic storage of files of a fairly old science-fantasy story-concept of mine.

So I present to you the world of Archsphere. I had made up a fictional world littered with civilizations of different races of different species.

I sort of abandoned this little project but figured it doesn't hurt to get potential comments or criticism.

Now the "Equix" is the holy book of Archsphere's most predominant religion, Octotheism. In the religion there is a single god of each of the eight elements. What I have posted is pretty much the "Book of Genesis" of the Equix.

Now for those that have read it, let me mention that elements in the narrative are only mildly personified. You don't take it 100% literal. For instance when it's mentioned that the elements (brother and sister) bear a child, it's more like they "spawn" a child. Also I purposely made the vocabularly basic and repetitive, since it is an old old text using only the basics of grammar to get it's point across.

If you've noticed, the reason why I came up with "eight elements" and the creation story for it is because I intended to have the story parallel to the actual universal and geological history of the solar system and Earth.

Chaos and appearance of light ----> big bang
Appearance of Fire/Earth ----> the planet formed by accumulating plasma and molten elements eventually cooling off.
Appearance of Air/Lightning ----> Volcanism releasing gases and forming the atmosphere.
Appearance of Water/Spirit ----> Planet is cool enough for liquid water to rain on surface followed by appearance of life.

Light, Fire, Lightning, and Spirit have a similar essense because they are generally "energy-based." Light is the mother in a sense that all four give off light.

Darkness, Earth, Air, and Water have similiar essence because they are generally "matter-based"

Yup, I put Darkness under matter based, because it represents dark matter/graviton which (based on my universe and vague scientific theory) is why all matter has a gravitational field. Darkness is the father in a sense that all four have gravity.

Now for the preview pic:

What I had did before hand was create a map of Archsphere on Corel Paint Shop Pro X

For the circlular emblems I spaced out and created the circles all on the basic Paint program. I rearranged that thing pixel by pixel (Shiat, I remember that thing took me a hell of a time :P )

Then what I did was took the emblem pic into Paint Shop Pro, did some fancy cut/pasting and put it over a section of the map and then cut it off the original map and Wah-lah!

That right there is probably the most time-consuming hardest art thing I've ever done, lol.

So yeah, starting form the top circle and going counter-clockwise the order of elements is:
-Light (star-thing twinkling....though it looks like friggin snowflake >_<' )
-Fire (a :flame:)
-Lightning (a bolt)
-Spirit (white circle represents birth and the black is death and the blue spotted is "life/living")
-Darkness (the four small circles represent the matter-based elements - all have gravity and all can provide darkness/lack of light, whether it's a mountain shadow or cave, a dark storm overcast, or the deep depths of the ocean.
-Earth (mountains)
-Air (Clouds)
-Water (the center is liquid water flowing with a blue cloud on top representing water vapor and a blue mountain representing ice).

Currently in Archsphere there are two major categories of "magic." There is the orginial (elemental) magic, which has been dubbed as the gift from the gods themselves.

Then there is transmutation, which is a much younger magic that have been discovered just over 200 years ago. This magic is titled as artificial and sacreligious according to Octotheist clergy.

Overall the difference between elemental magic and transmutation would be the difference of manipulating an element as it is opposed to changing one element into another. Based on octothesit clergy, transmutation tampers with the elements(gifts) that the Gods have presented on Archsphere.

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I would have to say my biggest inspiration to this story-concept would be Final Fantasy (particularlly VII) Harry Potter, and Animorphs. Avatar:TLA was seldom an influence since I hadn't even introduced myself to it when I came up with this. (It was the element aspect of Avatar got got me to love it in the first place :nod: And no, Full Metal Alchemist wasn't the biggest inspiration for the "transmutation" (as awesome as the anime was)though it had helped a lot to direct me to the classical termology of Alchemy.

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Very interesting. Like how it's a creation story within a creation story. I also liked your decription of the "personalities" of the eight gods. They fit very well with the natures of the different elements, or at least, as I've come to see them. (I've had to do lots of "nature watching" for Elementals while trying to figure out all of their personalities. Which is difficult seeing as there are sixteen of them. X--X) I hope that I get to see more of this, it's really interesting!!

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This is great work atmos, I'm realli glad you dug this up :nod:

Beautiful imagery, very creative, and written like a true mythology! :D

I also love the title "Archsphere", it's so awesum <3 You should totally consider furthering work on this, cuz there's definitely potential here ^o^



p.s. GAH, that title's stuck in mi head! now I won't be able to think of one for my story for awhile D:


lol ;P


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Woohoo! I'm glad to hear that the personalities are in synch with their nature :D And it's always cool seeing people's different perspective and classifications of "elements" and all.

I think I still have more Archsphere stuff piled up. I guess I could get into again...well see, heheh.
But I'm very glad you liked it :)

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Aw, thanks. :D

The approach Mythology approach definitely the route I was going for.

ooo, and you think the title's catchy, That's so cool! I normally suck at coming up with names/titles but I never came up with a catchy title 'that gets stuck in people's heads' before :evillaugh:

*clears throat* Of course I don't want to it to (negatively) affect progress of others ^^; lol!

But I'm glad you like. :)

I guess if I'm getting a good response with this I could go back to it again.

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